Hindsight is a wonderful thing
May. 24th, 2015 11:16 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
ffuturesBack in 2008 I wrote Forgotten Futures X, The Tooth and Claw Role Playing Game, based on Tooth and Claw by Jo Walton. It's a fun setting where the player characters are cannibalistic dragons whose Victorian-ish society was loosely inspired by Trollope.
Seven years too late I've realised I missed a wonderful opening lines for one of the NPCs - the banking and insurance magnate known as The Crimson Claw, who has grown so big that he dwarfs any player character and can never leave his vaults - the tunnels are too small for him.
"I like the smell of debtors in the morning... they smell like... breakfast..."
I could almost kick myself that I didn't put that in, but I think it's really a bit late now. And to be honest, while it feels like a fun line, it might not quite cause the sensation of mind-numbing terror I want characters to feel if they meet him.
Seven years too late I've realised I missed a wonderful opening lines for one of the NPCs - the banking and insurance magnate known as The Crimson Claw, who has grown so big that he dwarfs any player character and can never leave his vaults - the tunnels are too small for him.
"I like the smell of debtors in the morning... they smell like... breakfast..."
I could almost kick myself that I didn't put that in, but I think it's really a bit late now. And to be honest, while it feels like a fun line, it might not quite cause the sensation of mind-numbing terror I want characters to feel if they meet him.
