Date: 2014-07-22 03:38 pm (UTC)
So far it's mostly a nice "shore leave" episode, though with some accumulating narrative tension woven in. I look forward to seeing the threat come out into the open.

I note one minor grammatical point: the sentence I think we have that covered, so why don’t we all try to get an early night, it’s going to be a long weekend is what is traditionally called a "comma splice," a kind of run-on where two independent clauses are bumped together. After "early night" I would suggest either changing the comma to a semicolon, or changing it to a period (full stop) and capitalizing "It's."
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