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I'm trying to describe a submarine being blown out of an asteroid via a convenient ice-ammonia geyser without it sounding like an elaborate sexual metaphor.

I've already had to modify the diagram of the geological structure that does this because it looked a bit too penis-like.

Any suggestions on synonyms for "squirted" etc.?

Date: 2010-09-19 04:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] whswhs.livejournal.com
How about "blasted" or "streamed"?

Date: 2010-09-19 05:01 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] speakr2customrs.livejournal.com
I thought of six synonyms within ten seconds; they're all even worse double-entendres.

Date: 2010-09-19 05:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vicarage.livejournal.com
No, but I'm now chuckling!

Date: 2010-09-19 05:16 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] johnreiher.livejournal.com
Hmm, "erupted", "geysered", "shot cannon-like into space"?

Date: 2010-09-19 05:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nelc.livejournal.com
I think you're done for; once you think of it, you can't unthink it. You'll just have to embrace it and go with the flow.

Uh, you know what I mean....

Date: 2010-09-19 08:16 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] jinxed-wood.livejournal.com
Sorry...can't help...too busy....dying from laughter...

Date: 2010-09-19 09:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] raygungothic.livejournal.com
I'm struggling.

"ejected" and "forced" really aren't all that suitable. Can you re-phrase more extensively to get something like "cause the ship to break out of the surface"?

Date: 2010-09-20 07:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bugshaw.livejournal.com
Use a strong metaphor of a whale spout to outweigh the other imagery? Plenty of people escape from whales that way in fiction. Hmm, asteroids as space whales :-)

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