Another illustration

[ffutures]

This one will probably be a smallish filler illo.



Not 100% sure of the wording of this, maybe it should be "if the Sirians try to invade," "when" sounds like it's inevitable.

I might try some variations on WW1 recruiting posters too.


Monday 12.30 PM - I've changed it to:

Where will YOU be
When the Sirians attack?

The Imperial Navy and Marines need YOU!
Join the fight TODAY!

I think the original was too verbose, this feels a bit more like a real recruiting poster. Thanks to autopope for the header, and everyone else for their comments.

Comments

[pauldrye.livejournal.com]

Or just "if the Sirians invade", which has the punchiness of the original but the ambiguity of the latter.

[robertprior.livejournal.com]

Where will you be when your mates need you?

[pauldrye.livejournal.com]

Where will you be when the Sirians need mates?

Sirian invasion

[samthereaderman.livejournal.com]

You don't recruit with a maybe. And where will you be could be stronger. How about:

Who'll Save Earth
When the Sirians invade

The Empire needs every man
To fight for the future of Earth
And the freedom of humanity!

[whswhs.livejournal.com]

I actually think that a government of the period might say "when" even if it actually was "if," hoping to encourage more enlistments. Assuming just a mild streak of jingoism, anyway.

[liliaeth]

I don't know, both seem a bit awkward to me. But then again, english isn't my first language. It just feels like there's a syllable to much for it to sound quite right.

[autopope.livejournal.com]

"Where will you be when the Sirians attack?"

(Doesn't require a conditional, doesn't imply an enemy success in putting boots ashore.)

[ffutures.livejournal.com]

Thanks - that's just right, I think.